>o lukin! mi pali e toki awen pi jan Akapeli Pin kepeken toki pona. 

pona!  sina jo ala jo e lipu pi toki awen?  ala la, mi ken ala ken
pana e toki awen ni tawa lipu mi?


>sitelen lawa nanpa wan

"pi nanpa wan"


>li suli ala. mi sona e jan mute. tenpo lili la ona mute ale li toki 
>kepeken lon ala. jan sama mama Poli en meli jan moli en jan Meli kin 

"meli pi jan moli"

>li toki kepeken lon ala. sitelen ni li toki e jan sama mama Poli e 

That looks wrong.  Mark Twain wrote:

>>I never
>>seen anybody but lied one time or another, without it
>>was Aunt Polly, or the widow, or maybe Mary. 

- that is, they are the only ones he knows of who don't
(to his knowledge) lie.

Your translation sounds like "Polly and the widow and Mary
also lie."


>nasin seme? jan ala li sona. meli jan moli Takala li kama jo e mi li 

"meli pi jan moli"


>jan lili e mi. ona wile li e ni: mi kama sona e nasin pi jan lili 

"ona li wile e ni:"

>mi kama jo kin e len jaki mi li mi pilin pona mute. 

That last "li" should probably be "la", right?


>meli jan moli li pana e telo oko tan mi li pana tawa mi e nimi pi 
>soweli suwi sona nasin ala. 

That's unclear; maybe another "pi" would clarify it.

"nimi pi soweli suwi pi sona nasin ala"

or

"nimi pi soweli suwi pi sona ala e nasin"

But I'm not sure the last form is grammatical.


>li kalama la jan wile kama tawa moku. jan li kama lon supa moku la 
>jan li ken ala kama moku. tenpo nanpa wan la ona li anpa e lawa ona 

"tenpo pi nanpa wan"


>tenpo lili pini la mi wile moku e kon jaki. 

"moku" as "smoke"?  mi wile toki e ni:

"mi wile kon e kasi seli." 
(mi volis spiri brulantajn foliojn) 



>jan meli sama ona li jan Wason. ona li sama palisa li jo 

"jan meli" -> "meli"?



>tenpo ni la ona li kama tawa 
>mi li sona e nasin sitelen tawa mi. 

"...li pana e sona pi nasin sitelen tawa mi"

>tenpo mute lili la ona li pana e 
>pali tawa mi. 

"li pali e mi."


>tenpo pini la meli jan moli toki e ni tawa ona: ona o 
>pini.

Why "ona o pini"?  Why not just "o pini"?

>ona wile pali e ijo pona taso tan ni: ona wile tawa 
>lon ma pona. taso mi pilin e ni: ma ni li jo ala e pona tawa mi. mi 
>pali e pilin awen ni: mi wile ala tawa lon nasin ma ni.

Mark Twain wrote:

>>..... she was
>>going to live so as to go to the good place. Well, I
>>couldn't see no advantage in going where she was
>>going, so I made up my mind I wouldn't try for it.

I think you left out the "where she was going" clause.

I'd translate that something like this:

"taso mi pilin e ni: ma ona li pona ala tawa mi.  mi wile 
ala tawa e ma ni tan ni: ona li tawa ma ni.  "


>tenpo sin la jan Wason li pakala mi. mi pilin wala ala li pilin ike. 

"wala" li toki e seme?  sina wile toki e "walo" anu "wawa" anu seme?

>>.... but it warn't no use.

>taso ni ona kama. 

? That's missing something.

"taso ni li pali ala pona."


>soweli tomo 
>li mu tan jan kama moli. 

"tan jan pi kama moli"